Vaibow
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I think retooling JL is an easier question to answer - let's say for instance, we were tasked with the job JW's was given and reshoots or chance to tweak.
What i would have done, in the opening credits, added to the montage of a scene - have STAR LABS scientists look over the body of Doomsday, it's body monitored, there is an easter egg of a pulse on a monitor in the background as a scientist draws blood for tests.
I would have a tv playing a news article on crime rates, as it zooms out, you see Joker and Harley looking around an abandoned warehouse as a possible new 'home' lair with goons hanging about etc.
The rooftop scene with Batman was great, i would have added more back story to the parademon though - i would have cut to the where the parademon was, how it was being harboured, who it was with and then it senses fear. I forget now, but how did Bruce know so much about them, just lex's notes?
I would cut the whole pet cemetery sequence - no frankenstein style rebirth, when cyborg and flash at the grave, cyborg scans it and there is nothing down there. A week passes, Bruce is at a function - Alfred cuts him short, lois is on the line, she needs his help -Cut to 12 hours earlier - a science lab - Gen Swanick is over seeing the incarcerated body of Doomsday, he then walks into another room, a bright light bursts from the door frame - artificial light is shone on clarks body, it's almost blinding he looks angelic - clarks body is laying there, in black. Lois is waiting to come in, as she walks in, she realizes what they have, mixed emotions, pissed off, sad, upset, distraught, she hugs clarks lifeless body and wants to know answers, she beats on Swanicks chest, sobbing - how dare they disturb him - Swanick thanks her for coming and explains Clark, his alien DNA, it's not like humans, he still has a pulse, there is still brain activity - they only found this out due to the work on doomsday - when natural light hit his body, his brain waves were triggered. Clark had been there for 3 week and swanick has shown her the reports, activity is being recovered - Lois asks to take him home, they refuse - government property now, Swanick is almost embarrassed to say so.
Cut to the team on the roof top, looking down - they have the plans in hologram form on cyborg - they plan to go in, rescue clark. Epic heist scene occurs - but the mother box secretly used to help regenerate Clark sets off a signal and steppenwolf appears - the JL barely escape alive, clark over the shoulder of AM (he was easier to recruit when he knew clark was alive).
Back at Wayne Manor, an almost alter like scene set up - mirrors all aimed at clark, natural light bursting through. Lois waiting, patiently.
Meanwhile the team track down SW to russia and they head there, starting the onslaught. It's not red, there are no weird flowers or veins, it's just grey, abandoned and SW is under the tower, brooding. He has 3 mother boxes and he is talking to DS via a portal - his work is done - not to terraform, but just find the boxes and return them.
Clark wakes up - confused, lois is there and comforts him - he remembers - he asks about doomsday, the others, lois explains it all, he states he must help the others, has a decent line saying he loves her and will come back.
Back at the tower, there is a fight, similar to what we saw, when superman shows up, pretty similar, but in black and bearded - only humour i would add is barry allen, looks at him and says, like in a shocked way 'jesus' as it's an impressive scene but also very, god like.
Superman does what superman does and the team win.
End montage, similar but i would also add news teams and reports of the jl and superman back.
What i would have done, in the opening credits, added to the montage of a scene - have STAR LABS scientists look over the body of Doomsday, it's body monitored, there is an easter egg of a pulse on a monitor in the background as a scientist draws blood for tests.
I would have a tv playing a news article on crime rates, as it zooms out, you see Joker and Harley looking around an abandoned warehouse as a possible new 'home' lair with goons hanging about etc.
The rooftop scene with Batman was great, i would have added more back story to the parademon though - i would have cut to the where the parademon was, how it was being harboured, who it was with and then it senses fear. I forget now, but how did Bruce know so much about them, just lex's notes?
I would cut the whole pet cemetery sequence - no frankenstein style rebirth, when cyborg and flash at the grave, cyborg scans it and there is nothing down there. A week passes, Bruce is at a function - Alfred cuts him short, lois is on the line, she needs his help -Cut to 12 hours earlier - a science lab - Gen Swanick is over seeing the incarcerated body of Doomsday, he then walks into another room, a bright light bursts from the door frame - artificial light is shone on clarks body, it's almost blinding he looks angelic - clarks body is laying there, in black. Lois is waiting to come in, as she walks in, she realizes what they have, mixed emotions, pissed off, sad, upset, distraught, she hugs clarks lifeless body and wants to know answers, she beats on Swanicks chest, sobbing - how dare they disturb him - Swanick thanks her for coming and explains Clark, his alien DNA, it's not like humans, he still has a pulse, there is still brain activity - they only found this out due to the work on doomsday - when natural light hit his body, his brain waves were triggered. Clark had been there for 3 week and swanick has shown her the reports, activity is being recovered - Lois asks to take him home, they refuse - government property now, Swanick is almost embarrassed to say so.
Cut to the team on the roof top, looking down - they have the plans in hologram form on cyborg - they plan to go in, rescue clark. Epic heist scene occurs - but the mother box secretly used to help regenerate Clark sets off a signal and steppenwolf appears - the JL barely escape alive, clark over the shoulder of AM (he was easier to recruit when he knew clark was alive).
Back at Wayne Manor, an almost alter like scene set up - mirrors all aimed at clark, natural light bursting through. Lois waiting, patiently.
Meanwhile the team track down SW to russia and they head there, starting the onslaught. It's not red, there are no weird flowers or veins, it's just grey, abandoned and SW is under the tower, brooding. He has 3 mother boxes and he is talking to DS via a portal - his work is done - not to terraform, but just find the boxes and return them.
Clark wakes up - confused, lois is there and comforts him - he remembers - he asks about doomsday, the others, lois explains it all, he states he must help the others, has a decent line saying he loves her and will come back.
Back at the tower, there is a fight, similar to what we saw, when superman shows up, pretty similar, but in black and bearded - only humour i would add is barry allen, looks at him and says, like in a shocked way 'jesus' as it's an impressive scene but also very, god like.
Superman does what superman does and the team win.
End montage, similar but i would also add news teams and reports of the jl and superman back.